YOU SAID:

This sentence is grammatically correct, but it's wordy, and hard to read.

INTO JAPANESE

この文は文法的に正しいですが、言葉が多く、読みにくいです。

BACK INTO ENGLISH

This sentence is grammatically correct, but it has many words and is difficult to read.

INTO JAPANESE

この文は文法的には正しいですが、単語が多くて読みにくいです。

BACK INTO ENGLISH

This sentence is grammatically correct, but it has many words and is difficult to read.